Victoya McDermott
9/17/2014
He sits at a grey round table, in the cafe area of the big
library on 42nd street. He starts typing on his laptop,then his fingers
suddenly stops moving and he loosens his navy blue tie that's sits on his light
blue shirt. He starts biting his finger nails then starts drumming his finger
tips on his left knee that is covered by black slacks.he gets up walks a couple
of steps to his left, his black leather shoes squeking with every step. He rubs
his head then sits back down. His phone rings and he pulls out a white and gold
iPhone 5s, he yells into the receiver that he "needs more time". He
hangs up the phone and throws his head down on the keyboard his silver reading
glasses falling to the table. He starts to look around the cafe, then stares at
his keyboard, the corner of his mouth begins to pull and he starts typing away.
She walks holding her lower back while her loose sheer black
shirt blows in the wind.The guys she's with is holding her arm gently walking
her to the nearest green table. She sits down crossing her legs showing her
freshly pedicured toes in her pink sandals. He loosens his top button of his
white button down shirt and takes a seat in the green chair next to hers. They
both stare smiling at each other for a while, he then goes into a yellow bag
with the letters PAX written on it. He pulls out a tuna sandwich and a water
bottle that says Poland spring. He feeds her a bite of the sandwich
accidentally spilling tuna on his khaki pants. He uses a brown napkin to wipe
it up and notices she has tuna stuck on the left corner of her puffy pink lips,
he uses the napkin to wipe it away gently. She brushes his red cheeks and he
begins to smile, then they both began to chuckle. He whispers something into
her ear then rubs her belly and she smiles and wipes away a tear off her
swollen face.
Her blondish brownish pigtails swings back and forth as she
runs through the grass humming a song, her yellow flower dress blowing with the
wind. She's splashing in every puddle with her blue rain boots with every step
she takes.she then turns to and spots the birds her brown eyes glistening in
the sunlight, she starts to chase after them. She starts spinning in circles
chuckling, her voice high pitched. She takes a piece of white sheet paper out
of her back pack shaped like a poodle and lays on the grass coloring with a
green crayon. She then starts to hum the same tune she was humming just moments
ago. A lady in a blue sheer dress calls out to her "Allison let's go
honey". She turns to the lady and smiles reveling small dimples on both of
her cheeks and skips toward the lady. They both hold hands and head out the
park.
With an odd brownish orange color for a pigeon, it sits
shaking it's head in the wet grass. It starts shaking is feathery wings and
white tail feather. It picks at a piece of bread on the concert ground, then
flies over to the other normal colored pigeons. They began to fight over a
piece of bread they're black beaks moving rapidly. The other pigeons flies away
from the brownish one leaving it to sit in the grass by itself. The brownish
pigeon with it's orange beak flies up to a tree branch, where it sits there
looking down at the other pigeons. The other pigeons walk together along the
grass poking they're heads in and out. The normal pigeons then fly off
together, the brownish pigeon heads in the same direction trailing far behind.
There is a lot happening in your scenes, they convey sentiments. I can't choose which I like most, perhaps the second paragraph, it's very sweet. The third one is cute. I feel so bad for that odd pigeon
ReplyDeleteI like your description of a girl especially this line "She's splashing in every puddle with her blue rain boots with every step she takes.she then turns to and spots the birds her brown eyes glistening in the sunlight, she starts to chase after them." I can really see that little girl going in every puddle. This description gives a feeling of happiness that the little girl reveals. :)
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